The Cloud

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers!  Rochelle Wisoff-Fields leads our international band of fictioneers by providing a photo prompt to inspire us each week. Writers from around the world post 100-word stories, based on the prompt. You can see them all here.  You can post your own story, too!

Many thanks to Jennifer Pendergast for this week’s photo.

Photo Copyright: Jennifer Pendergast

Photo Copyright: Jennifer Pendergast

The Cloud

by Jan Brown

Jenny woke to blistering sun and silence. Transfixed, she tiptoed onto the porch. Everything was still. No birds, no crickets, no passing trains.

Footsteps caught her attention. She turned to see her son in his Army Ranger uniform.

“Mom, why haven’t you evacuated?”

“Evacuated? ”

“The cloud is coming this way. We have to move, NOW.”

“The cloud…like…Microsoft?”

“Like the bombs that were dropped overnight.”

“By whom?!?”

“By us! They misfired…fortunately landed far away, but the fallout will kill us. We can still get to the shelter at Fort Benning in time.”

She stared at him, wide-eyed.

“C’mon, let’s go!”

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44 thoughts on “The Cloud

  1. Dear Jan, Good story and the Microsoft Cloud is great! I really like your story and you could take it different ways. Maybe she was sleeping off a hangover and didn’t hear the sirens! Really interesting take! Nan 🙂

  2. I hadn’t thought “post apocalyptic” from the prompt but, on second thoughts, it does look rather bleak; like something out of a Clint Eastwood film. Good piece.

  3. I wondered if anyone would go down the post apocalyptic route – that scenery looks so barren. Good one Jan, and I loved the ‘cloud’ reference. Sometimes it’s the little asides that lend that touch of authenticity to the character.

  4. Oops, sounds like there’s been a small nuclear mishap. Funny Microsoft reference – I reckon if someone shouted “evacuate – cloud!” at me, I’d probably get on the computer and delete my pictures 🙂

  5. Oh geez, Jan…just when I decided to stop worrying about stuff, too! It certainly does look barren out there. Great dialogue 🙂 The Cloud reference was hilarious!
    Ellespeth

  6. Great dialogue and a clever storyline. The barren landscape well fits the idea of a nuclear ‘accident’ and the Microsoft cloud reference was perfect. I think poor Mom hadn’t yet had her first cup of coffee! 🙂

  7. The Microsoft cloud! That’s perfect, Jan. That would probably be my response. We don’t think something like this could happen in our backyard. Great story for this dusty prompt. Well done, Jan.

  8. Dear Jan,

    Amazing how technology has added new meanings to old words, isn’t’ it? When I saw your title my head went to the iCloud. ^^’
    As always your story is imaginative and your writing exemplary.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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