Wishing

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers, when writers from around the world post 100-word stories based on a photo prompt provided on Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ blog. This week’s photo is by Doug MacIlroy. Thank you, Doug!

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Wishing

by Jan Brown

They met at this very spot in the Japanese Tea Garden. They talked all afternoon, laughing, touching, kissing.

Watching the koi.

They married here in the park, celebrating their love with friends and family. Their schedules didn’t allow a proper honeymoon, just a few hours retreat at their private spot in the garden.

Watching the koi.

They didn’t take time for many vacations, but they built a koi pond behind their suburban home. They relaxed there, talking, laughing, touching, kissing.

Watching the koi.

Now she was alone on the park bench, wishing they had taken more vacations.

Watching the koi.

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52 thoughts on “Wishing

  1. Smelling the flowers, watching the Koi, checking our smart phones – we have our priorities wrong today. Definitely make time for the first two activities. Nice, but sad, story.

  2. Wow! Wonderful story, that doses the bittersweet almost a poem… walking us along gently, to the sad end. On Wednesdays, I jump in and write my post, but oh the sweet linger of reading all the others. THIS was a real delight!

  3. Dear Jan,

    The lament of many ably told in a well written story. The repetition was wonderful, the mood quiet and peaceful, the end an ever repeating story. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  4. Dear Jan,

    I’m guessing this is from a widow’s perspective. And Joni Mitchell’s words echo in my head, ,”Don’t it always seem to go that you don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone…” Love the rhythm that read like a song or poem. Nice one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. I liked the rhythm of this, too, Jan. I sensed sadness and disappointment, but also mingled within some happiness. The koi pond seemed to hold them together. I really enjoyed this. Nicely done! – Amy

  6. sad but realistic – that´s life. I love how you use “watching the Koi” to show how time is passing…
    Liebe Grüße
    Carmen

  7. Stopping to smell the roses, or to watch the koi, is an important realization that often comes too late. You’ve expressed it well, and I wonder how many of us will pause long enough to enjoy the swish and splash of this pond.

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