Waiting

It’s almost time for Friday Fictioneers, when writers from around the world post 100-word stories based on a photo prompt provided on Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ blog. This week’s photo is by David Stewart.

As always, I encourage you to read other Friday Fictioneers’ work by clicking the link that appears below my story. Enjoy!

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Waiting

by Jan Brown

They sat on the roof, waiting for the spaceship to come and take them away.

Jessie’s brother, Jimmy, discovered it on their field trip to the observatory. When he peered through the high-power telescope, the docent said they were meteorites. But Jimmy imagined that one of them was slowing down. It must be a spaceship!

They had been waiting nearly 24 hours. Jimmy shifted uncomfortably; his wounds were raw. Dad used a hot iron, cigarette butts, anything that would burn flesh.

Jimmy said that, if Jessie didn’t come away with him, Dad would start on her next.

He’s probably right.

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34 thoughts on “Waiting

  1. Dear Jan,

    Well done. What seemed to be a sci-fi story turned out to be tragic reality. This one made me ache.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS Kudos to you for spelling my name correctly. 😉

  2. Jan, this was horribly sad, and very well written. It’s hard to say one “likes” a story like this, but it was perfectly tragic and terrible. I guess if it were poorly written, I wouldn’t care, and wouldn’t feel this ache that you’ve put in my stomach.

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