[FGC #7] Nature’s Stretch

blossoms kiss pink sky
grass peeks shyly, greets the road
nature tests itself
and me: slowly I feel my
crippled limbs stretch, touch the sky

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11 thoughts on “[FGC #7] Nature’s Stretch

  1. This left me sighing contentedly. I had the windows open all day due to lovely spring weather, and my old body could use some of that renewal.

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  3. Now this was a masterful engagement of the form! Especially on the “turn” in the third line. In your last line, the word choice of “crippled” tells so much – – I could read so much story into this line, along with feelings of hope.

    Really well done!

    Barbara @ de rebus
    www(dot)derebus(dot)net

    • Thank you very much! You have a great appreciation for the tanka form! I am happy that the poem was evokative of so many feelings, and in the end, the promise of something more.

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